This week we have been learning how to create a piece of writing using a picture to help us. First we had a class brainstorm on what the picture was about, then we brainstormed some adjectives. Finally we started our writing.I am sharing it with you, please leave a comment.Thanks!
We are going to another planet far, far away this week!
Think about using your senses. Smell, taste, hear, feel, see.
Remember to use correct punctuation and spelling.
Remember to use similes, and adjectives.
Use correct sentences.
Myth Mud Caves
Hello my name is Sapphire. I'm an alf and I am friends with another alf named Willow. Willow is going to bring her friend Butterfly-butterscotch I live in the gem cort. It's a place where all gems and friends can come or stay. I like to eat clouds it's the close thing to candy floss on gem cort. The gem bait Leeds anywhere so we are going to use that as are way there. Any way me and my friend Willow are going on a trip to a place named Myth Mud Caves. We want to find out what's there and what it looks like lets go and take a look. I hope you like the story we have put together for you to read. lets go.
One day me and my friend Willow and her friend Butterfly-Butterscotch went to a place named Myth Mud Caves. We wanted to no what was on the land. We used the gem bait to get to Myth Mud Caves. But the thing is we don't no if the gem bait has the Myth Mud Caves. We need to go find out if its in the gem bait so we can go to the Myth Mud Caves. YAY we found the Myth Mud Caves on the gem bait finely we can go and take a look.Wow we have finally made it to Myth Mud Caves. “It's so extraordinary and it’s like a peace of art” said Willow. “It looks like something from the forest where me Willow and live” said Butterfly-Butterscotch . “It’s so beautiful do you think” said Sapphire.”Let's take a look around” Willow said. So off they went. After 1 hour we found the gem bait dust scattered on the floor behind us. Willow didn't tell me that she had the gem bait dust. I Sapphire said “who has the gem bait dust” “I do” said Willow with one tear in her eye as her eyelashes fluttered with puppy eyes looking into my eyes. “Oh Willow it’s fine no need to cry” said Sapphire. A few minutes later They found a swamp and tried to fly over but were never to be seen again. They put missing posters everywhere but no one had heard of them for weeks and years.
Hello Mikaylah.When I look at the picture,it makes me think of little people with black caps draped around their shoulders.I like that you have used your imagination and great use of descriptive words.Butterfly Butterscotch,what a cool name.I like how you have used speech marks for when people are talking.Maybe next time,only write a small amount an concentrate on correct punctuation.
ReplyDeletethank you Miss Cassidy for your comment. I will remember to write a small amount an concentrate on correct punctuation :D
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